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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university？

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Introduction
What
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skills
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 should
universities
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 provide has been argued for many years. Some people think that the true function of
universities
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provide
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knowledge
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 for their own purpose, but nowadays, more and more people point out that
universities
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 should provide graduates with
the
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knowledge
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 and
skills
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 according to the
workplace
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.
Body paragraph 1
The
first
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 reason
for
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universities
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 should provide
these
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this knowledge
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knowledge
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 and skill is the
students
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' needs. Obviously,
the
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most
of
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the
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students
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 go to
university
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 purpose of is to get some
knowledge
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and
skills
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 which could make them
have
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the ability to get a job. If a
university
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 does not provide
these
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this knowledge
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knowledge
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 and
skills
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, the
students
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 might not get a job and they would be very disappointed.
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, the
university
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 would lose its
students
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.
Body paragraph 3
Moreover
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, providing
knowledge
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 and
skills
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 needed in the
workplace
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 makes
a
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university
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 progress.
The new
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skills
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 and information always are initiated in the
workplace
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, so focusing on the needs of the
workplace
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 the
university
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 could get sound strategies to do research and make it more
mordenization
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modernization
.
Body paragraph 4
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, providing
these
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this knowledge
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knowledge
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 and
skills
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 could benefit our country which usually gives
a
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financial support to
universities
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. Having
these
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this knowledge
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knowledge
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 and
skills
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,
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students
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it students
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 are
more easy
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 to get a job, and
this
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 can make our
countries'
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country's
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 economy strong.
Conclusion
In conclusion, it can be said that providing the
knowledge
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 and
skills
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which
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 the
workplace
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 needs
is
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 every
universities
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’ basic function.

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