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Nowadays, many schools find it profitable to sell unhealthy food and sugary drinks to students during lunch breaks. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The given data reflects how the percentage of computer users changed over the given period as well as compares these users in 2002 and 2010 by education level. Looking from the overall perspective, it is seen a constant growth in terms of computer ownership between 2002 and 2010.
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, with higher levels of education, more people tended to use computers.
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, about 55% of the population used computers in 2002.
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, only 15% of people without high school diplomas had access to them, whereas almost 40% with high school diplomas had. In 2002 approximately 80% of postgraduates and 10% less for bachelor's, in turn, had computer ownership.
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