Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

With a good
salary
, people always hear about good
money
, but do they enjoy
such
work? Today I will share my opinion on
this
. If there is a
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choice
choise
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choice
between choosing a good
salary
or
lovely
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job
, I will choose
lovely
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a lovely
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job
. Having Fun,
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at work and communicating with
pleasan
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pleasant
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colleagues is much more interesting and comfortable. From my experience, I can say that I worked
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in
im
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in
my
favorite
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job
with the best people and I can say that these were unforgettable days for me. But
unfortunately
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another point shows that the more
money
you earn, the happier your life is, no matter how satisfied you feel about the
job
.
Also
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it gives you Financial stability. In
conclusion
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I would recommend
get
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a dream
job
with
big
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salary
. So nowadays people need
money
to live
also
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and also
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they need
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hard work
hardwork
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hard work
to get
a
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money
. I hope in the future all problems with unemployment and low
salary
will be fixed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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