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some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills . what are the causes? suggest possible solutions

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One of the most common problems that many employers are facing is that
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new employees do not have some knowledge about cooperating with their co-workers. In
this
 regard, it can be for different reasons, namely lack of work
experience
 and shortage of professional skills.
Firstly
, it should be mentioned that the vast majority of job seekers are youth who recently finished their education.
As a result
, they mostly have no team working
experience
.
Therefore
, it is undeniable that they cannot work well as a good team worker.
Consequently
, employers are interested in finding an efficient system to solve
this
 issue.
For example
, most
of
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graduated
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 students in chemical engineering will be absorbed
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industrial jobs in which cooperation is essential. So, it probably makes some relevant difficulties for both the employee and employer.
Secondly
,
shortage
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 of professional training
also
 can be a significant factor that
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 some problems
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 good team working in the
labor
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 market.
Accordingly
, many businesses have been under the influence of their amateur workers
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 they have recently
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hired.
Nonetheless
, designing an effective pattern for training them is one of the most sizeable challenges that they are encountered
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.
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 my own individual
experience
, a systematic internship definitely might be a considerable choice because I had a brilliant
experience
 that really helped me when I was hired for the
first
 time. In conclusion,
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 employment
such
 as organizing
internship
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 and technical courses are the two prominent solutions that companies and businesses can be considered.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • cooperative skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • digital communication
  • non-verbal cues
  • active listening
  • education system
  • technical knowledge
  • soft skills
  • remote work
  • work environment
  • comprehensive training programs
  • workshops
  • teamwork
  • role-playing scenarios
  • open communication
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational institutions
  • curriculums
  • hybrid work models
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