Some people prefer to provide help and support directly to those in need. Others however prefer to give money to national and international charitable organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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as social media to view everything happening in the world. We can better know if there’s anybody who needs help. The question now is coming out, in what
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is the best for us to choose to help the
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who need help
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Directly? Or we give
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to the organizations. I think giving
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to the organization is the best
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for most
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. Everyone has their own job and own things to do. it ‘s hard to manage time and separate for different things. But busy
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kind, we give the support we can,
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the same time our work is not affected. But
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some
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prefer to give their help to those
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. They have time to become volunteers for some days. But my suggestion is better not to choose
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. I think we need to take more
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than just giving the
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and letting other professional
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do those things. We can’t know the
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we will help. Is she/he a good person? Not everyone who has a heart knows how to be grateful. Some
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will threaten you to get more
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. I’m not saying that we don’t have any risk
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the other
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.
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money
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to the organization
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has some risk. What if the organization takes all the
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they gather and runs away? But in fact,
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is better than the risks we may face by directly supporting those
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. It’s really good that we didn’t forget to help each other. The world will be kind because of our help.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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