Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Honestly,
Language
is more and more important in our life, especially foreign
language
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.
However
important it is, there are many
choice
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for us to improve ourselves. Lately, some schools have forced children to learn a foreign
language
. That was not good! Learning another
language
should depend on their choices and their hobbies.
For example
, students who
good
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at maths, physics or any other
subjects
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except English,
they
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must spend more time
to study
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studying
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English just
improving
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to improve
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their
English’s
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score
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at school. They are expected to become
a maths experts
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a maths expert
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,
physics
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or physics
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experts, but they can’t because they have spent too much time
for
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a subject
which
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that
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they don’t like. There are many cases like
this
in reality. Certainly, children when they are forced to do something they don’t like,
they
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will find ways to make off
it
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. In conclusion, children or other people should have their independent choices and schools – a place where
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learning
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learning
and teaching
also
respect their choices.
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