The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans illustrate the original and the current configurations of the facilities in a public park named Grange in 1920 and today. Overall, almost all the features in 1920
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been relocated or replaced with new areas or architectures nowadays. In 1920, a fountain was situated in the
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of the park, whereas in the North and the South of which, two entrances could be seen nearby
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Arnold avenue and
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Eldon street respectively. In the
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region, a stage for musicians was built in the
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, with two rose gardens located
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opposite sides of it. Nearby the gardens, four
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zones were constructed. In terms of the eastern part, a glasshouse was seen
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the bottom, while a pond for water plants was in the upper area. Nowadays, the fountain was replaced by a rose garden, with four
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it. The stage for musicians was deconstructed and an amphitheatre for concerts was built. It is noticeable that two rose gardens disappeared and a newly constructed cafe and a children's play area could be seen nearby
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Arnold avenue. In the South-East region, there was a new water feature which was close to the entrance underground car park.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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