Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantage for tourists who visit such places. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A long time ago, most people did not like to
travel
to hard places,
such
as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. Usually, popular tourist areas are being chosen because easy to move around from countries to
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countries.
However
, it's different now; some travellers are quite interested in going to explore
such
places; even
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space or the moon, to find out the experiment and for their
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despite requiring more effort to put on. A common tourist place may become boring for them, for those who love challenging work. By travelling to these areas, other people can learn from their photos, videos and their sharing experiences.
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It's wonderful for knowledge and advantages for the rest of us who don't even go there yet are able to see
such
lovely places.
For instance
, students can do their research or thesis as a reference.
Beside
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from learning opportunities, there are disadvantages as well, which can be happening during the
travel
such
as injuries due to
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in the desert or sickness due to
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harsh weather which is very cold or very hot.
Additionally
, those adventures have much
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prepare the journey in advance and will find
difficulties
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to stay there.
Moreover
, more financial burdens to
travel
to
such
areas, and no one can help if something happens to them. In conclusion, even if they'd like to explore those trips, the person should not visit alone and should
travel
with a group or with others who share the same interest.
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  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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