Some people say that the fast food industry has made a negative effect on health, the environment, and family eating habits. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons with relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The
food
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industry is one of the largest
field
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in business. Today a lot of consumers are buying and eating "fast
food
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,
effect
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the effect
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on
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climate change
of
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environment
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the environment
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. I totally agree that fast
food
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have
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negative
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a negative
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effect on Earth.
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the
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fast
food
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including
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recipe
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recipes
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such
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as fried potato and slices of
beef
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or pork between toasted bread,
futhermore
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furthermore
, it is very harmful
for
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human health because all of
these
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this food
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food
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hardly digestion in
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the stoma
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.
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of all,
to produce
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one kilogram of
beef
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could cost
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kilograms of carbon dioxide which is absolutely unbelievable. The green peace community would like to protect the environment with all their efforts and have some kind
programs
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of programs
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as artificially created
beef
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. So,
this
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kind of
beef
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could decrease the number of carbon dioxide and
in
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the
results
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result
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, the air will be cleaner than nowadays.
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, I would like to say that, I agree with all helpful and useful ecological programs.
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last
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time, folks
facing
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natural disasters,
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, communities should be more careful and responsible.
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, so many fires in forests happen and water flooding on
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the coast
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. Even predictions that
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the majority
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of cities will go underwater and
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not good. To sum up, humanity
are
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responsible for
quality
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the quality
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of air and water where people live. In near future, the government should take steps forward in
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an eco
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eco friendly
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way. In my opinion, authorities around the world can handle
with
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apply
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eco problems by doing law
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changes
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changings
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changing
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,
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, rise taxes for factories or for old cars.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Non-communicable diseases
  • Saturated fats
  • Disposable packaging
  • Carbon footprint
  • Convenience food
  • Nutritional value
  • Eating patterns
  • Socioeconomic disparities
  • Affordable meals
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