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Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying products (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment.) Do you agree or disagree?

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While availing
service
 or acquiring anything, myriad factors affect the selection process. Out of all, the budget for it is more important.I partially agree with the aforementioned notion. The financial boundary condition for acquisition and
service
 depends on its obligation of it. Below mentioned paragraphs will portray my idea with appropriate examples. Embark on, whenever an individual decides to purchase any new widget it depends on many factors. The prerequisite of the tool and its application of it is more important. For
instant
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an instant
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,
while
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when
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 buying a mobile it is very important to know what would be the
use
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 of it. If anybody looking for
a
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apply
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business purposes
then
 the
price
 of it is not
a
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an
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 important factor because its features are more valuable.But, if
individual
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the individual
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 is looking for
home
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the home
a home
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purpose
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 only
then
 the
price
 of it is very important.
Secondly
, While taking any
service
 it
is
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also depends
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also
 depends on its necessities of it.
For example
, If anybody is taking medical
service
 for the
enhence
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enhance
 the beauty like plastic surgery or hair transplant
then
 it is important to think about the
price
. On
other
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hands
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, If it is very important for our health like a cure for a heart attack
then
 there is no financial
boundation
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foundation
 for it. Because
,
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apply
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 it is important for our body and we must avail
this
service
. In conclusion, the
price
 of
service
 and obligation purchases always depends on the requirement of it. If it is very important for anybody
then
 the
price
 does not matter but if taking it for comfort and for showing off
then
 the financial matter is important.
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