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Anecdote in a train station or airport when you have gone on a trip, where you were going and what advice you give so that it does not happen.

This
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 paper is about my anecdote at the
airport
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 in
Thailand
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.
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First
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 of
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all
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al
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, I will explain my anecdote at the
airport
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 and where
i
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I
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 was going
to
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.
Finally
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, I will give
my
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advises
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advice
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to avoid
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avoiding
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 the same or similar situation. I was at the national
airport
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Thailand
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, because
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big countries usually have two airports, the national and international. So, I went to do the
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check-in
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check in
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check-in
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 when the worker told me that my suitcase was too heavy and I should
to
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pay a lot of money for it.
However
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, I opened my suitcase and started to put on many clothes
for
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 be the bad less heavy.
Then
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, the worker asked me please to stop because all the people at the
airport
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 were watching us and here were ashamed
about
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 the situation.
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, I was going to another place
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 the country called Pai, I had been waiting to go to
this
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 place during the trip due to is one of the more beautiful places in
Thailand
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, and for the
mistake
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 with my
suitcase
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 I was closer to
lose
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 the flight.
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 at the beginning I was a little bit ashamed like
worker
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a worker
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 I continued by reason of I knew that in some airports the workers try to cheat
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European travellers. In conclusion, I loved the trip to
Thailand
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 and I would like to come back again, but my
advise
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advice
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 to avoid that situation or
similar
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a similar
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 one,
it
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is to read before and among the trip all the information about everything and be very patient, as a lot of people for ignorance pay for many unnecessary things.

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