number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education

This
bar chart shows the number of female students per 100 male students in primary, secondary and tertiary
education
. It’s clear from the graph that more boys than girls were enrolled in
education
generally.
According to
what is shown, primary and secondary
school
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illustrated similar behaviour. The difference in female students increased significantly in developing
countries
from 1998 and 1999. The number of
female
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per 100 male learners
fall
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from 87 and 82 to 83 and 72 in primary and secondary levels respectively for developing
countries
. Developed
countries
merely showed and any difference for both levels at is was hovering in the top 90s which were near the target. In tertiary
education
developing
countries
had 75 women compared with 100 men in 1998 which later reduced
further
to the least at 66. Developed nations kept the figure above the target in both years at 112 and 105 respectively.
To sum up
, we could say that developing nations had more balance in gender distribution
in
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primary
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the primary
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education
level
while
developed
one
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had overachieved the target in the tertiary sector
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