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In many countries, it is very easy to apply for and be given a credit card. However, this causes some people to have problems with debts they cannot pay back. Do you think the advantages of credit cards outweigh the disadvantages?

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Countries around the world have different points of view about the easy appliance for obtaining a credit card, several people thought that
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 is why a lot of communities have debts with the bank
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 others think the exact contrary. In
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text I want to explain why I find
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 fair that everyone has the possibility to access their own card.
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 I want to share the point of view of all the crowd that wants credit cards was not easy to achieve. I appreciate that there are
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 I believe that if you take a debt with a bank is your choice. Probably
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 type of person is not very interested in how they invest their time and money. According to my experience, I used my attention card since I was fifteen and I never took debt
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 is because I didn't t do something that created a risk for my treasury account, I never gambled, I never invest in crypto or in risky action.
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, a person
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 in possession of the cart had a lot of advantages in his life
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 to pay instantly at the cashier or can transfer money to his friend. Another example is my fund account on Hype where I have the possibility to exchange money with my friend. To sum up, there are two different currents of thought, how I explain in the above paragraph I agree with the fact that attention cards must be accessible to everyone, but
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 I respect their counterparts.
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