Many people now choose to move out of crowded cities due to many drawbacks of city life. Discuss the disadvantages of living in big cities.

Nowadays, large cities are becoming more and more inhabited, but living in a big
city
may result in many drawbacks because of some problems.
Firstly
, it has too many factories based on industrialization and modernization, vehicles,
traffic
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and traffic
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jams which cause air, water and noise pollution.
As a result
,
city
dwellers often suffer from health problems
such
as which
makes
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people
get many respiratory problems
,
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or even serious cancers.
Secondly
, urban
life
is much more stressful than rural
life
. The cost of living in the
city
is so high that many
people
often break the bank because of what they have to pay for renting a house,
traveling
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, and school fees which makes them really tense.
Thirdly
,
life
in the
city
is more dangerous than country
life
, because it has more traffic accidents,
a
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higher crime rate which makes
people
worried when living there. Adults are easily spoiled by bad habits including social vices. In brief,
city
life
has a lot of drawbacks that
people
need to consider carefully when they want to move to the
city
.
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