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Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, team
activities
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 are being encouraged throughout the world as it is being seen that it can be a good approach to make
people
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 friendly and cooperative. In
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light on the advantages and positive outcomes of
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 work. To commence with,
group
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activities
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 make
people
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 more cooperative among the main kind of their ages and they get to know other points of those big get a great chance to expose themselves by the insightful situation. To elaborate , they can acquire new friends which can have a positive result on their personality and obtain new experiences with them.
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, according to a survey conducted in Great Britain, it is being seen that
people
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 who are not and give in
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activities
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 or not being friendly
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personality
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 is changed into introverted. ,
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 the
people
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 get to know new
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 and the right and wrong Path on which day should go and they should not go.
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 to it, flocks who deserve themselves and do not talk to other
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 are
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 depressed and there is always a thought of doing suicide because they do not have many
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 to share with and they do not think that
people
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 were going to understand him or her.
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, it is being of How is served that
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 who do not talk have the highest ratio of
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 into the category of depression and there could be a habit of gathering negative thoughts. To conclude, I firmly believe that
people
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 who indulge themselves in
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activities
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 are more friendly as well as of extrovert nature, whereas,
people
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 who have a habit of being reserved and do not want to open up to other
people
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 have a feeling of depression all the time.
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, they restrain themselves from gaining new experiences and enhance their skills in the most positive manner.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication skills
  • problem-solving
  • collaboration
  • conflict resolution
  • leadership
  • accountability
  • social connections
  • networks
  • adaptability
  • empathy
  • diverse personalities
  • real-world environments
  • team dynamics
  • group cohesion
  • interpersonal skills
  • delegation
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