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Some people suggest that children do not understand the world or work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?

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Entering
work
-life for young people looks like a transition which has a significant effect on their future success. Some argue that youngsters should be prepared for
this
 change and school is one place that can take
this
 duty alongside providing academic studies. I totally agree with
this
 perspective and in
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 I will examine two reasons.
First
 and foremost, familiarity with
work
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the work
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 environment and career system is essential which helps employees get along well with their co-workers, managers and their boss. If adolescents have some
work related
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 experiments, they will obtain some vital knowledge regarding communicating and dealing with people and problems that could lead to efficiency and productivity.
Moreover
,
work
 experience is one of the most important factors in one’s curriculum vitae,
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 it might not sound fair as there are many capable and educated graduates with no experience who will not be able to find a job.
Consequently
, even some basic
work
 experiences or short-term internships can change employees’
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 and provide them with a better chance of getting higher positions. To summarize, schools are the most important sites in which students can build their future success and guarantee their career life by providing some opportunities for their learners in order to accept the challenge and gain knowledge about job atmosphere and participation .
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