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In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As the world is developing rapidly people are getting busier in their daily routines and in many ,countries people are working more than the given hours. As a
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 they have time to do household
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, and sharing the chores is one of the logical methods to overcome the hassle at the home. I completely agree with the aforementioned statement and the following essay will elaborate on my idea
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. In the past, according to different norms and,
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 it was said
women
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 had to do the house chores solely without the help of
men
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, as
men
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 were working full-time and earning for the family. With the development of myriad infrastructures and prices of stocks, petrol etc, is sky rising old routines have changed in peoples
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, today both
men
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 and
women
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work
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 fulltime. As a consequence of working, household
work
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 has to be shared with both parties, and
women
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 are unable to do the
work
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 by themselves. As an example, my parents used to
work
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 24/7 to compete with the living standards, but my grandmother did not
work
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, she was a housewife and my granddad used to
work
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 for a living.
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, sharing
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 at home will able to have a balanced lifestyle in
women
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 as well as
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.
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, sharing family
work
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 will set a good example for children’s
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.
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 they are facing these challenges in
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 one day, so if parents discuss and
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 together on housework they will be a role
model
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 in youngsters'
life
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. As well as,
women
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 and
men
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 will have a good mutual understanding of each other. To exemplify, my parents used to do house chores together, and today I am following in their steps.
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, it is logical that working together brings a positive aspect to children’s
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. To conclude, I agree that both parties
men
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 and
women
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 should share the workload to have a balanced lifestyle and be an example to their children’s lives.
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