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Universities should provide students with the skills they will require in order to succeed at their future jobs. To what extrnt do you agree or disagree with the above opinion? What are the some of the job skills employers look for new employees.

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These days, university students ought to provide knowledge and practical
skills
 with their future career benefits. In my opinion,
i
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 agree that practical
skills
 are beneficial for students at their factory jobs and there are two other
skills
in
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employees
that
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apply
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look for employment. I agree that higher education institutes can a huge amount of knowledge to pupils with practical
skills
.
In other words
, the implementation of theories helps pupils to increase their knowledge and achieve practical
skills
such
 as computer, driving and foreign language can help to get
a better jobs
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a better job
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 in future. The
skills
 of working together with other employee increase.
For example
, many companies offer jobs based on before
skills
. One reason employers look for some employees.
This
 is because a creative mind can contribute in a great way to the development of a company through worker thinking. No employer allows a person with an uncreative mind for a job.
For instance
, a creative employee can save the company from any situation.
Finally
, another reason is the ability to time management. A high number of tasks requires every worker to be able to manage their time and to arrange which one must be done in advance.
For example
, many responsibilities simply cannot be completed well without
such
skills
. In conclusion, achieving the key factor
skills
succeed
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to succeed
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 their future one to be an employee,
however
, get a good job two other skill can not be ignored.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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