Some people think that people in senior positions alone should make decisions in a business, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is an ongoing debate regarding, decisions making in business. A group of individuals believe that
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senior management is involved in
such
a process.
However
, others claim that
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workers should be elaborate
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these things.
Therefore
, ahead of my
opinion
, both
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will be discussed
further
. Examining the former
opinion
, the primary argument the supporters would put towards is top management is responsible for any kind of circular passing activity.
This
is because they much power
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to workers.
In addition
, they
also
believe that what we going to take
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action is becoming the final result. The reason is
owner
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of the business has not looked into
this
kind of situation.
On the contrary
, those in favour of the latter
opinion
have their own arguments.
To begin
with, they claim that senior employees should not have the
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they can take decisions without permission from the business owners.
Moreover
, senior staff have
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due to their higher
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permission.
This
attitude leads to
a wrong impressions
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in the
labour
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mind.
For instance
, on-time Diwali labour should be asking for bouns but senior management takes decisions without asking the owner. To conclude and offer my position, there are convincing arguments both and against decision-making.
However
, I certainly favour the former
opinion
.
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