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The plan below show the layout of a university's sports centre now and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

#plan #show #layout #university #sports #centre #redevelopment #summarise #information #features #comparisons
Here, we can see there are
two
 architectural plans that represent the present and after look of a university
sport
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centre
. The top layout is for the present look of the
sports
centre
. We can see that it is so simple
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compare
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 to the bottom layout
that is
 planned for redevelopment. There are three parts: one is the
center
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centre
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 building and the rest
twos
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two
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 are outdoor courts that surround the
centre
 building. A 25m
pool
 along with a
gym
 at the backside, a seating
area
, a changing
room
 and a space for
reception
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a reception
the reception
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 at the entrance of the building
summerize
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summarize
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 the
centre
builing
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building
. At the bottom, it represents the
future
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scenario
scenerio
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scenario
 of the
sports
centre
. If we closely look, we see that the
future
plan
 is the extended version of the central main building. Almost All of the facilities of
before
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plan
 are present here except the
two
 outdoor courts. In the before, at the entrance part of the
building
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,building
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 there was only a reception
area
 but in
future
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the future
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plan
,
at
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on
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 the left
side
 of
entrance
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the entrance
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 we see a
sports
 shop and
at
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on
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 the right
side
, there is situated a cafe.
At
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On
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 the left
side
 of a
sports
 shop in the
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south-west
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south
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southwest
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west
corner
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,corner
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 there is another
room
 for changing space. The changing
room
 has
two
 doors
at
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on
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 the
west
 and east
side
. From the
west
door
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,door
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 we can enter into
leisure
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the leisure
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pool
that is
 situated
at
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on
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 the
west
side
 of
swimming
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the swimming
a swimming
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pool
.
At
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On
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 the right
side
 of
seating
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the seating
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room
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,room
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 there is a
sports
 hall. From the cafe door, if we go to
right
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the right
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at
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apply
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the east we see a corridor that goes straight to the east and turns left at
north
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the north
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. At the end of the
corridor
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,corridor
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 we see the
gym
area
at
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on
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 the north
side
 of
swimming
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the swimming
a swimming
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pool
. The
area
 of
gym
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the gym
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 is extended in the
future
plan
. If we go out from
gym
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the gym
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room
,
at
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on
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 the left
side
 of
corridor
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the corridor
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 there are
two
 dance studios
that
is
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are
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 situated
in
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on
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 the east
side
 of
building
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the building
a building
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. From the
two
 plans of
university
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the university
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sports
centre
, we see the total
area
 is
same
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the same
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. The
area
 is not extended but the central building is extended by removing the outdoor courts for redevelopment.
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