Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think the advantage outweigh the disadvantages?

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Economic activities and factories
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brought major problems into large
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. Some argue that these activities ‘locations need to be removed from
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and relocated
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suburban and rural districts. I believe that the benefits of
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its probable drawbacks. I will examine the pros and cons in the following paragraphs.
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and foremost, large businesses are
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and will help drive
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economic growth.
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relocating, more jobs would be made available for the rural population which may
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prevent them from immigrating to large
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and would stop overcrowding.
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, the lands outside of
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and towns are less expensive.
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, less budget and funds would be needed
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and those savings could be invested for supplying machinery and equipment. Another positive point can be the low- income of
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cost of expenditures overall.
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, there are many merits
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those who want to start new businesses.
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, there are only a few disadvantages.
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, since the factories are required a large number of workers and labours, moving them into
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countryside, may cause a significant increase in the rate of unemployment.
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, the growth of businesses is slower
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those in large
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because of the small customer base and the low cost of living. To sum up, the idea of moving large companies to the countryside is encouraged by some people
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of its potential advantages. As I outlined my point of view above, the positives of
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in rural regions
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its downsides.
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