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Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The concepts of high-performing electric vehicles, introduced with other
electrical
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electric
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 vehicles, will carry on
LFA
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the LFA
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 legacy, albeit with
battery
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batteries
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 and several electric motors. These are just one of the many electric
cars
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 of the
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 generation with battery packs, which Lexus is going to create for the
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beginning
beggining
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beginning
 of the
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 decade. Supercar will be facilitated with solid-state batteries, which will provide power reserve for more than seven hundred
kilometers
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.
Upgrated
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Upgraded
 LFA is planning to be the
model
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 with
fuel-based
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the fuel-based
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 engine, which will be equipped
four-liter
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four-litre
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 engine v8 with doubled turbo in combination with
electric-hybrid
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an electric-hybrid
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 system. All these components produce system output in 700 horsepower. 16. Chinese
car
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 manufacturer “Greely” presented
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concept
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the concept
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car
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 “Greely Vision Starbust”. During the construction of
this
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model
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,
Idea
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 behind its
concept
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 was the space and the birth of a new star. The new philosophy of its
design
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 was named “expanding cosmos”, which will be used in
planning
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of
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apply
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the
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“Greely’s” future
cars
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 for the new digital era. The company has tried to make
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front
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the front
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 part
as
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apply
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a more visually stunning element:
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front
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 grille and air intakes are highlighted by massive LED
strip
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. The
design
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 of
previous
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front
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 grilles is totally changed.
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 new
concept
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 is a decoration made not only with the complex geometrical patterns and interior with soaring console
,
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 but
also
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 with full of cosmic rays
stipes
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stripes
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 on geometric selector of transmission. The
front
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 door headlight of the dashboard, smoothly
flowing
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 one into another, meanwhile creating the sense of limitless space in
cabin
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the cabin
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. 17. By 2040,
cars
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 will not only be autonomous, but they will
also
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 become so alive that we will be able to interact with these
cars
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 using voice and touch sensors. To bring
this
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 dynamic and at the same time create
cars
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 that will not only be autonomous in their functions
,
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 but
also
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 be perceived as a living
being
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beings
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, was the priority of the BMW
concept
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. It is planned that the
car
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 will turn into a living being and will work as a companion that strengthens the trust of users. The 2040
concept
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 is a philosophy
that is
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 likely to become a key aspect
in
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 the automotive industry in terms of development. 18. The company Kia seriously focused on
generation
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the generation
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 of the family-type
concept
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, especially during the pandemic period.
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 is the dream of all lovers of outdoor activities without exception.
This
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 electric off-road vehicle will have one of the newest stunning features in the history of the industry;
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 of all, the cabs are able to rotate, and
this
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 panoramic rotation creates great opportunities for both drivers and passengers. Taking into account its futuristic characteristics,
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car
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the car
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 will have
spacious
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a spacious
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 interior and uncredible smart tools, including
3D
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 hologram for
search
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 menu and entertainment. 19. Based on
argument
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the argument
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Ramon
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of Ramon
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 Barley, who works as
designer
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a designer
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 at Audi,
he
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understood how
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design
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 language of Bugatti should be enhanced.
As
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most
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with most
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 future
cars
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,
this
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model
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 is
also
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 planned to be fully electrical. In some ways,
this
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car
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 looks more like the “Pagany”
model
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, especially
at
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in
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 the side profile.
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, it has
quite
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a quite
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striking
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a striking
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design
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 with massive wheels and
marvelous
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marvellous
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 contours with futuristic expressiveness. The retractable glass roof, which runs to the back part of
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car
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the car
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 is particularly impressive.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dress code
  • professional attire
  • workplace culture
  • productivity
  • branding
  • perception
  • creativity
  • equality
  • bias
  • discrimination
  • first impressions
  • freedom of expression
  • quality of work
  • skill set
  • professionalism
  • comfort
  • clientele
  • stakeholders
  • competence
  • formal attire
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