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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
Earn a lot today is more essential than
fell
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feel
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 satisfaction and happiness
on
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at
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work
. I do not agree with
this
 statement because there
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the
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a
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 couple of reasons why it is important to have fun
from
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at
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 a job.
Huge
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 salary is not
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always
allways
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always
 mean success and
comfortable
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a comfortable
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 life due to some causes. The main reason is the person who goes to
the
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apply
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work
 might hate
this
 job and
does
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not want to stay at
this
 job, as
result
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 he has a stressful life or
work
 without
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motivation
motivaion
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motivation
.
For instance
, many rich people around the whole world end their life
with
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 suicide or retire from
this
 company for
long
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the long
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 break. Despite that the fun from
work
 can bring only emotional satisfaction, it
also
 might bring a multitude of money
in
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long
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a long
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 period of time.
Moreover
, today many affluent people from
Forebs
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Forbes
 make a lot of money due to the fact that they spend a lot of time and effort
for
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loved
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the loved
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case
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.
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, Elon Mask
whom
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whose
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 favourite sphere is space created a huge company like
spaceX
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SpaceX
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 or Tesla which bring him money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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