Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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. I do not agree with
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statement because there
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couple of reasons why it is important to have fun
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a job.
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salary is not
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always
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always
mean success and
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life due to some causes. The main reason is the person who goes to
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work
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job and
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not want to stay at
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he has a stressful life or
work
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without
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motivation
motivaion
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motivation
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, many rich people around the whole world end their life
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company for
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break. Despite that the fun from
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can bring only emotional satisfaction, it
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might bring a multitude of money
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period of time.
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, today many affluent people from
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make a lot of money due to the fact that they spend a lot of time and effort
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favourite sphere is space created a huge company like
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or Tesla which bring him money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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