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Excessive traffic has made cities unpleasant places to live and work in. For this reason, private cars should be completely banned from city centers. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most of the
cities
 have pedestrian precincts and from time to time they are in the news because
cars
 have been temporarily banned from the centre to reduce pollution.
However
, no town council has yet the courage to ban private motor vehicles from entering the city centre. There are several reasons why I should it should be done. The most important reason is pollution from car exhaust, which damages
people
's health causing respiratory diseases
such
 as asthma and bronchitis. At the same time,
traffic
 fumes attack the stonework of historic monuments and buildings, while the vibration from vehicles damages their foundations.
This
,
for instance
, has happened to many cathedrals in Europe.A
second
 reason why I am in favour of
cars
 being banned is in order to reduce the noise pollution from
traffic
.
This
 forces
people
 to keep their windows permanently closed and may cause psychological problems, including stress and depression, among
people
 living on busy streets. A
further
 reason is that most
cities
 were not designed for motor vehicles. A good example of
this
 is the historic centre of Valencia, which has narrow streets and few facilities for parking.
As a result
,
traffic
 moves very slowly and there are frequent
traffic
 jams. Beautiful buildings are spoilt by always having
cars
 parked in front of them and pretty streets always become unpleasant
traffic
 congestion and exhaust fumes
Finally
, I am sure that if
cars
 were banned,
people
 would find other more pleasant ways to move around
cities
.
for example
, they would walk or use bicycles as these would once again become safe and enjoyable activities in the city.
This
 in turn would bring about a general improvement in
people
's health. In conclusion,
therefore
, I Strongly support the idea that
traffic
 should be banned from city centres, as
this
 would enable
people
 to rediscover
cities
 as pleasant and healthy places to live.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emissions
  • Air pollution
  • Global warming
  • Noise pollution
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Public transportation
  • Green spaces
  • Urban residents
  • Enforcing the ban
  • Exceptions
  • Mental well-being
  • Healthier lifestyles
  • Local businesses
  • Tourism
  • Offset the need
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