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Some people think visitors to others countries should imitate local customs and behaviours. Some people disagree; they think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss the two views and give your opinion

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Traditional habits of the population play a major role in the recognition of a person.It is generally believed , that immigrants ought to copy the traditions of their local area,
however
, some
population
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 believe that they must not change their customers and cultures. I totally agree with the latter statement.
This
 essay will discuss both aspects of the topic and will give a valid conclusion in the end. On the one side,
public
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the public
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 who visit other countries
have
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 their own religion which leads to separate
customs
 and traditions.
For instance
, every country has separate written rules and regulations to give respect to visitors and immigrants ,
therefore
, it is the utmost responsibility of the host to take care of guests from other countries.
Secondly
, visitors are not permanent residents
thus
, they do not require to perform local habits and
customs
.
In other words
, I experienced when I visited India 5 years ago that
society
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 over there respected our religious
customs
 in spite of knowing that, those traditions were not according to their methods.
Finally
, people find it difficult to do other habits other than their own
customs
 and do not feel relaxed.
On the other hand
, the necessity of adapting to others’ cultures and behavioural manners has several justifications. The prominent one would be easy to survive without much disturbance in a new place when blending with others. Making friends,
for example
, become manageable by imitating local-cultural trends
such
 as learning a new language and common interests of host country people; thereby reducing the sense of homesickness.
Thus
, people can enjoy their visit as well as can practice new cultural things.
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