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#change #benefit #health #lifestyle
Nowadays, many people trying to break their bad habits in order to make a healthy lifestyle. I think most high school children eat fast food a lot. The reason is that
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 they don't have enough time or money to eat
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, I used to have an unhealthy
diet
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middle school. That time I usually ate out with my friends, especially spicy food. But now, I have been trying to maintain a healthy
diet
, since I learned about how important a healthy
diet
 is.
Firstly
 I started making lunch at home and try to eat more vegetables and fruits. A balanced
diet
 gives many benefits to people
such
 as
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 the intake of food and
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 your mealtime. There are
also
 financial benefits. but the most important thing is as we know it is good for your health.
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 I would like to suggest you
to
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eat
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. Because your body is like your home. So don't
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 them with
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garbage.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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