Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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on with it, or like some say
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to improve yourself
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and get over it.
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, accepting
life
as is, can give you peace with what you have,
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surging towards hurdles and developing
life
can make you feel proud of yourself. Most people say that
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accepting
life
with its
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shortcomings
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short comings
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can leave you content with what you already had
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means that you have accepted that developing yourself is like punching above your weight limit, which leaves them right where they are
this
doesn’t have to be wrong by no means, but it just leaves you with a room of probabilities of your potential.
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there will be a lot of potential players who can build a career of their own, but they
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with nothing solely because of their lack of commitment. While others say that, after accepting
life
is hard you have to tackle one of them, and resolve one at a time, to plummet your
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short comings
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to help you lead a better
life
and in the long
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this
helps you to progress in your
life
and not only you feel satisfied with the achievements you have done, but
also
feel a lot more confident by your self and you can tackle and
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that
life
throws at you.
This
character can help you boost your
life
in general.
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, all the successful people had confidence in them, all of them say the same line, stay in your lane, and do your job. In conclusion, both a bad
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with
bad
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a bad
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situation like either unemployed
shortage
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or shortage
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of money and
improving
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from
such
situations, each had
it’s
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own perks
while
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, people who feel content relax with
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life
and don’t stress much, and few
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to
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situations and develop themselves from it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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