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Some people think university education is to prepare students for employment. Other people think university has other functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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While many people go to
universities
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 to get a job, I strongly argue it has more functions rather than just
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training for
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employment
emplyment
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employment
. I think one of
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roll
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 of
universities
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 is a
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 institute. The other is
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the storage of knowledge.
Universities
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 the place the scientists get together and can conduct
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 to find new theory, material and medicines which we do not know now. Some commercial
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companies
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companys
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companies
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research
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 and development organizations, but they have it for money so
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research
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 topic is limited to applied science or applied engineering.
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research
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 is important,
in
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university,
they
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can do more fundamental
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research
reserch
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, which
do
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 not make money in
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 term but contributes to all of the people, thanks to the funding from the
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government
goverment
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government
.
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Researchers
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also
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 important as their knowledge itself.
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 to that, most
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universities
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 have their
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libraries
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libraries
. People can go there and access
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 number of books. It shows the university acts as a storage of knowledge.
From
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above
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reasons
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 I think
university
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the university
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 has more function than
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preparing
praparing
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preparing
 students for employment.
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