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The responsibility of bringing up children should be shared equally between mother and father. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The phenomenon of sharing the same duty of taking care of
children
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 with
parents
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 has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
this
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 issue in question may be, I totally agree that raising a
kid
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 should not be
one
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 side's responsibility. Of all the reasons why the liability of bringing up
children
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 should be shared equals
parents
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, probably the most significant
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 is that most
parents
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 in Hong Kong have to
work
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 to afford the basic expenditure of life.If only
one
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 goes to
work
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, and another
one
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 just takes care of the
children
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, they may be not able to raise the child and rent the house at the same
time
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. So,
both
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parents
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 must go to
work
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 to maintain their quality of life.
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,
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 in turn reduces their
time
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 bringing up the
children
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. If they can share the responsibility to take care of their
kid
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, they may able to find the balance point between
work
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 and raising a
kid
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. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that
children
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 can learn from
both
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parents
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' strengths. Without a mother or father, it is bad for the
children
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's development.
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, there are investigations conducted in Hong Kong, those
children
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 who grew up with single
parents
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 are not good at communicating with others, and most of them are more negative than others who raise with
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parents
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.
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,
parents
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 should manage their
time
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 to make sure they
both
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 have
time
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 to spend with their
children
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 and pass on their knowledge or experience to their kids. Under
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 link of thinking, it seems to me that shared the duty of parenting is more beneficial to the
kid
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, and avoids the negative effect of a single parent on the
children
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.
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