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Some cities ban private cars from entering the center and force people to use bicycle and buses. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages

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resent
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 years,
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technology
technalogy
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 is really developing day by day especially
vehicle
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vehicles
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.
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, majorities cities forbid personal automobile from
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 in downtown and the
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gaverment
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government
 emphasize, humans should
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 bike and autobus when they walk
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the
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downtown. I believe that
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this
 way is extremely useful for mankind. In
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, I will examine both pros and cons of
this
 can controversial issue. There are a number of significant benefits of
use
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motorbike and buses when they entering in the town.
First
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if
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 all, if humans utilise
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a bike
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bike
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bikes
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, it will prevent traffic
jam
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jams
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 in
city
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the city
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center
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.
Also
, when
people
use
bike
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a bike
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 or buses
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instance
instens
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instead
 of
own
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car
, it will be beneficial
our
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 environment because harmful substances emitted by
cars
causes
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 air pollution.
For example
, in Singapore,
car
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cars
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 are very expensive
therefore
, many
people
 prefer to
use
motorbike
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motorbikes
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 and public
transports
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transport
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 than own
cars
. So only rich
people
 drive
own
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their own
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car
 because the rent is high price
therefore
, many poor
people
 can not buy a
car
.
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 to the other side of
argument
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 despite it
is benefits
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also
 has it is
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a disadvantage
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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.
Firstly
, when
people
use
 private
cars
, it is put
people
's
life
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 in danger. According to statistics most accidents are caused by
cars
 so millions of
people
 are killed or disabled in
car
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accident
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accidents
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 every year.
Moreover
as a result
 of the increase in
cars
 traffic jams will
also
 increase. In conclusion, if
people
use
 a lot of personal
cars
, it will be harmful
for
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 the state budget. In my opinion, the
use
 of bicycles is
also
 beneficial for
people
's health, and it is free of charge.
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