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Some cities ban private cars from entering the center and force people to use bicycle and buses. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages.

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• In our modern life, transportation has been proven to be a revolution in almost every day type of cities and few towns prohibit personal automobiles from
come
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 in downtown and from my point of view,
people
 should
be utilize
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utilize
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 a
bike
 and public
transports
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transport
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 like buses to move within the urban. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both pros and cons of using
the
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bike
 and buses to go
to
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the
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somewhere. • There are a number of significant benefits of
utilize
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 a public vehicle and motorcycle
instead
 of
own
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owning
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automobile
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an automobile
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.
First
 of all the government emphasize, if
people
use
bike
 or buses
instead
 of their own automobile, it will be extremely beneficial for
environment
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the environment
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 especially for increasing air pollution.
Therefore
 in some large
areas
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 the administration forbid
for
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individuals to
use
 their own
transports
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transport
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 and
furthermore
, it helps to increase
a traffic jams
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traffic jams
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 on the road.
For example
, if taking Singapore,
people
 can not afford to buy
cars
 in there because
cars
 are exceedingly high-priced, and only billionaires purchase
automobile
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automobiles
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 there, and car rental fees are too expensive, so
people
 can not afford
it
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them
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.
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Therefore
Therfore
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Therefore
 individuals
use
 the
bike
 and public
transports
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transport
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. • Turing to the other side of the argument despite its benefits it
also
 has downsides
firstly
 the price of
cars
 is cheap in the country and everyone has their own car,
then
 there will be many traffic jams in the country due to the lack of
cars
, and now the main accidents are caused by
cars
, which leads to the death or disability of many
people
.
For example
, according to statistics, the number of
people
 who die or are injured in car accidents every year in the world exceeds two million.
In addition
, the increase in
cars
 pollutes the air, because
cars
 emit a lot of toxic gases, and bicycles are
also
 free of charge and do not pollute the air. • In conclusion, having weighed everything mentioned
up
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and I can come to
a
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 conclusion that if there are more
cars
 in the country it will cause a lot of problems and I think,
people
 should
use
wheeliecycle
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wheel cycle
 or public transport to reduce traffic jams so that
people
 can live a good life.
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