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Some cities ban private cars from entering the centre and force people to use bicycle and buses. Do the advantages of this police outweigh the disadvantage

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Some cities ban private
cars
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 from entering the centre and force people to use
bicycle
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bicycles
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 and buses. Do the advantages of
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police
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 outweigh the disadvantage? Private
vehicles
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 are banned from entering the centre and motivate the public to use public transport and motorcycles  more.
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 my point of view, banning
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 from the
center
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 in some cities solves traffic problems and reduces the
number
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 of car accidents.  . From my point of view , it has more pros than cons , but it
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 has disadvantages. In
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 essay, I will examine both advantages and disadvantages
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issue
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. There are a
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 of significant benefits of
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 will reduce traffic problems and help reduce the rate of accidents. Take
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, if humans will
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utilize
utelize
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utilise
  bicycles  motorcycles and buses more it will save time and fuel to go from one area to another area.
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, people use public transport, not their own
cars
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.
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, cycling has many benefits as it keeps us healthy and keeps us from carrying excess weight in our
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.
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 to that, banning entry into the city will greatly help reduce ambient noise in areas with increased vehicle noise.
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One
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 the other hand,
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 of
the
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 large
number
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 of
vehicles
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, our mother nature is greatly damaged.
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,today according to research conducted by scientists, one of the biggest factors in environmental pollution is the harmful gases emitted by
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. country of Singapore because
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 country increased the tax on
cars
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 in order to prevent traffic jams.
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, the
number
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 of
cars
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 in the nation is low and
vehicles
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 can move freely on city streets. In
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conclusion
conclution
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conclusion
, having weighed everything
mentained
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maintained
mentioned
 up, I can come to a
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conclusion
conclution
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conclusion
 that by banning
cars
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 in cities, there will be no noise and pollution in the city

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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