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You live in a small town of 10,000 people. A large green area in the centre of town is undeveloped. The city has sent out an opinion survey to see what residents would like to have built in that area.

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On the charts, there are informations about the distribution of money spent on music in Northern Ireland in 2005, 2008 and 2011. There are four categories: CDs, concerts, digital downloads and other sources. In 2005, the majority, (61% of the people) spent their money to buy CDs, but going to concerts was
also
 a popular activity (31%). Digital downloads were one of the lowest values with a 6%. In 2008, spending money on CDs started to decline, and with a sharp fall in 2011, the value was just 26% compared to 61%. At the same time, digital downloads started to rose up: in 2011, 43% of the chart was filled with the category.
Furthermore
, we can see that concerts started to decrease between 2005 and 2008, but in 2011, the amount increased back to approximately the same percent when it was in 2005. Other sources basically did not really change over the years, it stagnated between 2% and 3%.
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