Some people say that supermarkets and manufacturers have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on products they sell. Others believe that it is the consumer’s responsibility to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging.

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are created by supermarkets. it

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environmental

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college

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reading

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plastics

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might bring about

producting

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producing

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stores

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stores

and supermarkets.

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for buying.

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with

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supermarket

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the supermarket

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some

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belive

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taht

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that

shop

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and ever

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product

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problem not only

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plastic

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increasing

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product

prouduct

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product

plastic

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the shop

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shop

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shops

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hope

decline

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to decline

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imposing

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this

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this item

these items

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items

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moreover

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customer

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using

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bags

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for ever

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forever

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buying.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

193 words

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