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In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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Generally
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Generally
 speaking the world is exponentially globalizing.
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, nations and their cultures are being brought together. The question is whether
globalization
 helps us become open-minded or it makes our cultural differences
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lost. In my opinion, due to
globalization
 discovering
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 around us is never been easier. It helps one learn about cultural differences, meet new cultures and most importantly it helps
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understand itself and
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origin
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.
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 people are becoming
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 and possibly more united which are important elements when it comes to preventing global poverty and social inequalities.
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, it appears to me that
globalization
 makes our nations blend with each other and
consequently
 cultural differences are becoming erased. As people move around the globe, sometimes it makes them forget about their own
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traditions
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traditions
 while trying to fit in.
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, due to the
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, rough migration may lead to many disbalances. From my point of view, even though
globalization
 may lead to the loss of tradition and
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 enhance
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 disbalances, it has much more advantages especially when it comes to nations being more united and
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therefore
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therefore
 connected.
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