In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway line for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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financial resources on either constructing more
transportation
ways or utilizing to make existing
roads
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better, in my opinion, accomplishing the second option is clearly more crucial. It may be true that building new ways of
transportation
is useful for a country and
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citizens. It might be good for the economy; because these railway lines are faster and shorter, so much time would be saved. Unfortunately, in my experience, constructing
this
type of
roads
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in developing countries is pretty expensive and it is not beneficial for the country.
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also
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the fees for public transport and most people don't prefer these faster trains because of the high prices.
Apart from
this
, improving daily
transportation
roads
and vehicles would be definitely better. Repairing old
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and trains may
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a positive effect
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both citizens' mental health and
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environment.
Also
, cleaning up
roads
and renewing the road structure may be better for reducing pollution and
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better designed
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cities. In my point of view, living in a familiar environment with a higher
life-standart
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life-standard
is better than seeing new constructions
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to work. As I mentioned, all of these would have a positive impact on citizens's way of living, both in a mental and physical aspect.
Overall
, I really think that improving
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public transport would be better for
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country, so people's money should be spent on it.
It is clear that
both these two ways of renewing
transportation
are very nice, but improving sounds better than constructing.
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