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Some people think that all university students sould study whatever they like. Others believe that they shoyld only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

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Nowadays, education plays a major role in our lives. a large number of people think that
university
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students
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 should
study
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 only
subjects
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 that will be useful in their professions, while others believe that pupils can
study
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 everything that they want.
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 essay will discuss both views and explain my opinion. In my opinion,
university
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students
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 should be allowed to
study
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 their professional
subjects
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.
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,
university
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students
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 need to
study
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 hard to get jobs and
a high salaries
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.
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, it is obvious why many children choose to be scientists or technologists because
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 subject will insure them
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high salaries and workplaces everywhere. There are some reasons why pupils should learn only the main skills that will be useful in their future job.
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, if a pupil studies hard and
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 everything about his profession, he will be a qualified specialist and get a great full-time job.
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, my dad used to read every book about engineering and he got some information technology courses for his job, now he is a highly skilled civil engineer.
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, more than three companies proposed full-time work to him.
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, my dad does not know about some new jobs and sometimes he categorically does not believe that humanities
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 are equivalently noticeable.
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, pupils would be less stressed if they
study
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 whatever they like. Joyful people may be more creative and productive.
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, if a
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 student studies something extra, they may be versatile and
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 knowledge can be handy in the future.
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, IT was chosen and learned by my friend, but she read a lot of books about design and architecture.
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, now she is a highly skilled designer. In conclusion, I believe that
university
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students
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 need to learn their main
subjects
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 more than an additional one. In
majority
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the majority
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 of people who learn their profession and know how to work will be more demand.

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