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Many city centres these days have traffic flow problems, causing congestion and pollution. One solution is to build fast ring roads on the outskirts of a city, taking traffic away from the centre. While this is helpful in some ways, it also causes new problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traffic jams and emissions are common problems for many
city
centers
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. In order to tackle
such
 issues, the governments build prompt ring
roads
, which go through suburbs, because it helps decrease the load on a
city
 centre. Despite the
fact
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this
 causes other problems these
roads
 are the most effective solution nowadays. Traffic jams are caused mainly by using a
city
 centre for moving from one point of a suburb to another. If drivers were given alternative routes,
a
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downtown would be more empty.
Moreover
, decreasing
number
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 of vehicles helps to reduce emissions,
therefore
people
 become healthier. What is more,
such
 fast
roads
 allow
to lessen
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 the level of noise from cars. It provides citizens with better
life
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living
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 conditions.
On the other hand
, building
roads
 brings
people
 some difficulties
such
 as closed streets and noise near houses during
constructing
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.
For instance
, building ring
roads
 in my home
city
 caused
closing
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tram ways
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tramways
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 for 2 years.
Although
 it brought obstacles for
people
,
this
 activity was temporary and after that citizens could evaluate
advantages
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the advantages
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 of the new road,
for example
,
fast
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the fast
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 commute, the free
city
 centre and the calm main street which crosses the heart of the
city
. In conclusion, I would like to highlight, that in spite of the fact, that constructing
ring
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 road continues for several years on average and causes some obvious problems for citizens,
as a result
, the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
People
 get a modern comfortable road, decreased both the number of congestions and
a
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 pollution level in a
city
center
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.
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