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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home,leisure, and work activities. Do the advantages of information technology outweigh the drawbacks?

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Information
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 is thought by some to be an integral part of today’s world affecting many areas of life.
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 the widespread
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 of IT has certain drawbacks, the advantages are at large and
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 will be justified in the following paragraphs. What could be regarded as a drawback of the rapid expansion of
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 is deteriorated health
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 An ever-growing number of people become dependent on the
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 of the internet and automation due to its convenience. Affecting one’s lifestyle,
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 makes them idle, and
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, it reduces their productivity. But the worst thing is that, according to numerous studies, everyone who overuses IT will face problems with physical and mental health (it may even lead to incurable diseases). It is obvious that
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advancement in
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 has led to numerous successful changes in mankind’s lifestyle.
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, nowadays
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 resources are free and accessible to everyone. It means that even if someone lives on a remote island, he or she could enrich their knowledge and enhance their mindset (the only thing is internet access). The
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 point is that IT enables people to stay at home living their daily routine without losses.
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, after 2020 many companies switched to teleworking and it became widespread. Nowadays it is even possible to sunbathe and cycle indoors.
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 to the consequential drawback, the benefits of information
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 are more significant and exceed the drawback as with the wise
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 of automation humanity will change life only for the better.

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