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The percentage of overweight children in the western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

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There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether in the
last
 ten years the proportion of overweight children has gone up by almost 20%. In
this
 essay, I will discuss some probable causes and effects of
this
 quick change among western children. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that in the modern world, almost all
food
 is filled with hormones that cause a quick acceleration among kids. The hormones may make a young person grow faster,
become
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 taller and wider than previous generations.
Moreover
, fast
food
 and fizzy drinks may have a terrible effect on children’s looks. The endless consumption of fast
food
 and unhealthy drinks may have serious consequences, like being overweight at a young age. The drawbacks of being overweight at a young age are apparent.
Firstly
, overweight children may have constant health problems.
For instance
,
obese
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obesity
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 may cause some heart problems and are unwilling to do sports.
This
 may turn to
increasing
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 laziness and unwillingness to do any exercises for children’s health.
As a result
, a kid may become overweight at a really young age
that
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 will make him eat
food
 without stopping because of a strong desire to eat something, which, undoubtedly, may cause perilous and scary problems with the child’s health. On balance, I would assert that if parents notice that their child is overweight, they should undertake some feasible solutions to make their child back as the kid was
enormously
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. Because young humans are too small to realise
to
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apply
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what effects obesity may lead and how torturous to have a lot of extra weight may be.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overweight
  • obesity
  • caloric intake
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • screen time
  • physical education
  • nutritious
  • psychological well-being
  • self-esteem
  • socioeconomic
  • healthcare system
  • life expectancy
  • obesity-related complications
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