Some people think that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or a health club, while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient. Discuss both view and give your opinion

In our modern
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individuals can choose between the type of actions which help them keep
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health
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. One group of
people
thoughts that, attend to
gym
clubs is
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better than ordinary to do a
such
of physical exercise, like walking or climbing. In my view,
person
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make
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all of these
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in the house, and it is about how
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person
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motivated.
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discuss
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both
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sides of
this
statement. It is
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truly
true
trule
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truly
significant
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trend for
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generation to be a
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healthy
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heathy
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person
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people
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in
community
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. A multitude of
people
goes to the different classes of
gym
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the gym
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, like yoga or
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stretching
strething
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stretching
, and today it
is become
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a new trend among the youth.
Moreover
,
gym
classes are not expensive as was in the past,
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this
reason
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many students can afford themselves to pay
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sport
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activities
. For
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instance
intance
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, Kazakhstan's teenagers went to some
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activities
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with their elder parents.
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Furthermore
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,
people
can do every exercise right and
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efficiently
effecently
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efficiently
,
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and have
result
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results
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in
short
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duration.
On the other hand
, citizens could do all of these services for free. They might
to
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buy
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necessary items for doing
sport
at home or in the park. The main reason for
that is
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is not require
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a
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plenty of things.
However
,
people
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a
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such
of
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activities
with a kind of
sports
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, like running in
stadium
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,
and
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climbing mountains, or
a
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simple
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dancing at home. All of these actions
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well
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will
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be
count
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counted
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as a
sport
.
FOr
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example,
people
who can not afford
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several
service
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services
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of
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gym
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the gym
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,
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does these
activities
without special things, and the result is not bad.
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youtube
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channel
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people
could watch some of
plenty
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types of
doing
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sport
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sports
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,
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except
exept
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except
gym
classes. In conclusion,
person
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can
hundle
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handle
with
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health problems, without
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to
the
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payfull
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gym
clubs. By the way, the main reason for that,
people
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pay for service, due to they do not have enough motivation. Stories a lot of
people
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that, issue in the working condition and going to the
gym
improve a relationship between
fammily
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family
members. Despite that, it is a substantial
benefits
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for everyone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cardiovascular health
  • resistance training
  • physical endurance
  • muscle tone
  • caloric expenditure
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivational factor
  • fitness regimen
  • holistic health
  • sustainable exercise habit
  • metabolic rate
  • physical exertion
  • exercise consistency
  • health maintenance
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