Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugar which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
In recent years many food industries
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sugary goods should be made more expensive to motivate the
people to use free sugar products.
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diabetes .
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force
the
manufacturers to stop producing sugary goods.
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nutrition
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