Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

Many people argue that
increased
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number of trading and growth of many companies has put
strain
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a strain
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of
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on
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the environment. I completely agree with
this
statement as there is
rise
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a rise
the rise
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in global
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temperature
temperatures
tempreature
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temperature
around the world and microplastics
found
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are found
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in every mammal on the
planet
.
Firstly
, global warming is a rising concern in
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today's
todays
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era, the
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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cases caused by
the
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apply
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factories and industries are generating more and more
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carbon dioxide
carbondioxide
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carbon dioxide
.
This
has resulted in trapping
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more sunlight than required by the
planet
. As per
study
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a study
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conducted by Harvard review of
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the planet
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planet's
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planet
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major coastal cities will submerge by 2050 and most
of
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nations
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the nations
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will face
shortage
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a shortage
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of freshwater due to
melting
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the melting
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of glaciers.
Secondly
,
rampant
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the rampant
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production of plastics over a century has now taken a toll
that is
irreversible. Microplastic is the new cause of
concerns
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concern
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which is
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affecting
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effecting
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affecting
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the flora and fauna. Microplastics are plastics which
cannnot
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can not
be seen by the naked
eyes
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eye
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hence
are now found in almost every mammal on the earth. In the study
conduct
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by
University
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the University
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of Melbourne , microplastics
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in
iin
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in
humans will cause diseases like cancer etc. In conclusion, globalisation and
expansion
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the expansion
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of corporates have endangered the way of life of living beings
to
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for
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which we all are responsible. We should collectively look for
sustainable
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a sustainable
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way forward to save
this
planet
. We owe it to the upcoming generation to provide them with a liveable
planet
. At
this
speed of
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globalisation
globalization
gloabalisation
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,gloabalisation
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no amount of economic growth will be meaningful when we have no habitable place to survive in.
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