mployers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these vies and give your own opinion.

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some personal questions
such
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martial
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status,
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related pleasures etc, which some people argue is
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question while other feel these are important to know the overall character. I strongly agree these personal questions define the
compatability
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compatibility
of a
person
.
First
of all, some people feel that
employer
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should have little concern
with
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one's personal life. Personal information can be misused and create biased decisions. Taking an example of
Australian
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resume whose standard format does not include any personal information. They believe in the notion that
employer
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employers
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should only look for skillsets required and right to privacy is given priority.
This
way
someones
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gender or sexuality
are
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not discriminated against and the level playing field is equal.
However
, I believe that
more
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we know about the
person
less
are
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the
margin
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of
errors
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.
For
example
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a
person
who has no social
skill
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cannot be an advantage to the company. Simple things
such
as
martial
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marital
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status can tell if the
person
is used to
responsibilities
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the responsibilities
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of married life. A good recruiter takes every hiring as a piece of
pussle
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puzzle
and
see
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where it can be the right fit In conclusion, additional information will help in making
informed
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decision
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decisions
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. Being on
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both
side
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of the table as
worker
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and as a
boss
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there are certain responsibilities in each role which requires the best
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judgement and knowing more always helps.
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