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some people like to try new things, for example , places to visit and types of food. other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Some individuals interested in trying new experiences ,
as
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an
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 eat different
food
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 and visiting new places. While some humans prefer to continue doing
things
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 like before. In
this
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essay
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 both sides of
argument
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the argument
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 will be analyzed before a logical conclusion will be provided.
Body paragraph 1
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 of all,I believe that it depends on
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people
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personality
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personalities
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. It means if humans have active and risky
character
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, they prefer to try new
things
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.
Such
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 as
,
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 different
kind
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kinds
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 of
food
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 from other countries and visiting new places.
Body paragraph 2
In terms of psychology,
people
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 that enjoy
of
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new
things
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 , are more successful than others
particularly
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 in their life and communication.
Body paragraph 3
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, they are very sociable and they make friends very easily.
Body paragraph 4
On other hand, some humans are not interested in trying modern
things
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 .
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There is a view that some
people
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 who
they
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are not active, desire do
things
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 constantly and continuously.
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Due to their personality, they have limited
feriends
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friends
 and communications and it leads to
repeatativy
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repetitive
 life.
Body paragraph 7
In some same cases,
people
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 believe that they waste their money and time by
eat
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 new
food
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 in a new restaurant because they may
do
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not like
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the favor
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favor
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flavour
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 of
food
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 .
Body paragraph 8
Sociologists believe stingy
people
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 usually are not
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interested
intersted
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interested
 in doing new
things
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.
Conclusion
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up
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,
although
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 trying new
things
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 are too risky, its advantages will
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outweigh
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out
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outweigh
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weigh
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itweigh
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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