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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both sides and give more option.

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The two figures illustrate how owning home machines has changed and how much did it take to finish the housework in one nation in the period between 1920 and 2019. It's clear that the ownership of different home machines increased greatly in 2019 than what it was before. Whereas, the time needed to finish any task decreased greatly during the same period. In detail, The number of homes containing Regrigator showed the fastest increase to reach its peak in 1980 by 100%, Followed by the vacuum cleaner, Which increased with a lower slope to reach 100% in 2000.
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 to that, the number of washing machines' containing homes decreased in 1980 AFTER 20 YEARS OF CONTINUOUS growth.
However
, it returned to grow again to reach just above 70% in 2019. In the same period, The time required to finish any task showed a massive drop between 1920 and 1960 to need approximately 20 hours per week, before it settled in 1980 at just above 10 weekly Hours, With a final insignificant decrease in 2019, to need only 10 hours per week for different home tasks.
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