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Some business prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree?

#business #offices #governments #places
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 number of
companies
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,companies
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 smoking is not allowed, especially in the
workplaces
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workplace
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.
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the
thte
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the
 police of some
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counties
countries
countyes
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countries
 smoking in central areas is interdicted too and I agree with that
,
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 because it is one of the greatest
way
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ways
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 to control
individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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 health
condition
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conditions
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 and make humans healthy.
Nowdays
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 we are living in
the
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 world where is almost everyone
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has
haso
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has
 some problems with their health condition, especially
lungs
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 disease, which means the main reason of course smoking.
The
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are
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the
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a
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 number of companies where
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it
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is
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it
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is
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banned, because by
the
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using
this
 way, company managers are able to balance employers and increase the quality of work.
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other
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the other
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 side smoking
in
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into
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buildings is not allowed, because of
of
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workers and company materials too. All people are different, which means not everybody is careful and
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responsible
responsable
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responsible
with
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for
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themselves
themselws
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themselves
.
For example
, if somebody will smoke in hidden places
into
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in
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 the building,
such
 as in WC or in own room, after doing that he or she might forget about his or her still burning
sigaro
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Figaro
sugar
,
they
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and they
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 always throw it without putting out it and
this
 little mistake can reduce a huge amount of problems. If the fire will start almost everything will burn, including essential materials and of
course
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,course
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 all
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employees
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employes
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employees
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 will be in danger. So
that
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smoking is banned in
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business
bissines
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business
 companies.
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 the policy of
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countries
countryes
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countries
, smoking is not allowed, especially in centres. Smoking in crowded areas might be
big
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a big
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damage
demage
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damage
the
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to the
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 individuals
in
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there.
For instance
, in Japan especially in central parks or in
stereets
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streets
 people do not smoke, because
of
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fines are too high and not everybody is not able to pay them
,
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 so
that
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people avoid
from
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this
 kind of bad habit there. In
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conclusion
conclution
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conclusion
, individuals should control
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themselves
themselvs
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themselves
 and give up smoking, whenever if they
they
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do not, even
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 or the biggest
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companies
companyes
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companies
 are not able to save their health. ,
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