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Money should be spent on creating new buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing one. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there is a great discussion about whether
money
 could spend on
built
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building
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a new
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new buildings
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buildings
such
 as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing
one
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. Many
people
 believe there is nothing wrong with
this
 action. In
this
 essay will argue why I strongly agree in the following paragraph.
Firstly
, there are many
reason
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 to agree with creating
a new
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new buildings
a new building
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buildings
 rather than
renovate
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renovating
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.
To begin
 with, the most important of improving for
next
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 generation
to
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 see beautiful places, because in the future some
people
 will have to
talking
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 about
the
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history.
Moreover
, the
further
 of spending
money
 to create
a new
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a new building
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buildings
 is make the town attractive and motivation to
tourist
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tourists
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for example
, when tourist travel in the country they might
be expect
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 to see all around the city and look at the
buildings
.
As
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the
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this
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 reason, the tourists will remember and tell
to
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apply
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the
next
 group.
On the other hand
, some
people
 argue should
spent
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spend
be spent
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 on
renovate
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renovating
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building
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buildings
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. The main of
consume
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money
 on
renovate
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renovating
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 is
for
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to
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 recover the building and save
money
 to consume.
For example
,
repair
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repairing
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 or paint of
color
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colour
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 in the building
although
,
this
 is difficult to do but some
people
 need to
attempt
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itattempt
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.
However
, the
buildings
 were dangerous for
people
 in the city because it will
possible
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 to broke impact for
people
injury
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injured
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 in the future. In conclusion, many
people
 argue
spend
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spending
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 more
money
with
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on
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 something which is not necessary
however
, I agree that should be spent on creating new
buildings
 or
place
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places
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. it is helpful for the city and
environment
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the environment
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.
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