In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?
Nowadays, young people tend to spend more hours with their friends than with their families.
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change has taken place Linking Words
due to
the smaller numbers of people living in each house these days and parents shouldn’t force their children to stay at home as Linking Words
this
would not foster good relationships within the family.
Young people spend more of their free Linking Words
time
with their friends because they generally have fewer family members. Today, a person has to look outside the family unit for someone to interact with as most households are made up of small nuclear families, which is in stark contrast to the past when many siblings, cousins and grandparents all lived together. Use synonyms
This
inevitably leads to them developing closer relationships with non-family and choosing to enjoy their leisure Linking Words
time
outside of the home. Use synonyms
For example
, in Britain, the number of members per household has decreased by around half in the Linking Words
last
50 years.
It is not advisable for a mother or father to oblige their son or daughter to spend more Linking Words
time
with them as Use synonyms
this
will not create a situation where the family bond well with each other. If young adults feel that they have to stay at home under duress, they will be in a bad mood as they don’t have enough control over their lives and they will not enjoy any interactions they have with their parents. Linking Words
For instance
, a recent article in the Huffington Post argued that it is the quality of Linking Words
time
rather than the quantity that ensures a good parent-child relationship.
In conclusion, young adults are spending a greater amount of ages with their friends than with their families because there is little company available and parents should not force their children to do Use synonyms
otherwise
because Linking Words
this
would damage their relationship rather than improve it.Linking Words
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