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A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • Tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves • Say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her • Explain how to apply for the job.

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The chart provides information about the number of men and women in higher
education
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education
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81 period with around 850 thousand people.
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level
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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